Conan! What is best in life?
To find writing issues, see them driven before you:
- STR_MASTERS_OF_SHOGG_UFOPEDIA: "workforce" would be better as "labor".
- STR_OPTRONICS_UFOPEDIA: "using light" should be "that use". "and therefore" should be "and are therefore".
- STR_CYBERWEB_PORTAL_SYSTEM_UFOPEDIA: "to maintain reasonable frequency" should be "to maintain a reasonable frequency".
- STR_MUTANT_BLOOD_PLASMA_SYNTHESIS_UFOPEDIA: "With the recent medical discoveries" would be better as "Thanks to our recent medical discoveries".
- STR_PSIONIC_LABORATORY_UFOPEDIA: Suggest replacing "assess the psionic potential of all soldiers at the base and give them" with "give all soldiers at the base", as psionic strength is revealed automatically anyway.
- STR_HOVERTANK_ROCKET_LAUNCHER_UFOPEDIA and STR_HOVERTANK_LASER_CANNON_UFOPEDIA: ", this unit features" would be nicer as ". Hovertanks feature".
- STR_LIZARD_TRAP_UFOPEDIA: "as soon as a Reptoid appears" should be "as soon as a Reptoid appeared". "their leaders" would be better as "his leaders". "gives word" should be either "gives the word" or "sends word".
- STR_GRAV_MODULE_CONSTRUCTION_UFOPEDIA: "bettlefield" should be "battlefield".
- STR_UFO_PROPULSION_UFOPEDIA: "serve purpose" should be "serve a purpose". Suggest slight un-mangling of "they conduct and resonate to electromagnetic and gravity waves, fed into them directly through a Power Source's base, resting on Tritanium floor" to "they conduct and resonate with electromagnetic and gravitic waves that are fed into them directly through a Power Source's base, which rests on a Tritanium floor". "state of gravitic-magnetic field" should be "state of the gravitic-magnetic field". Suggest rephrasing "This also explains how UFOs go down when their power sources begin to fail through the feedback effect, even though our weaponry hasn't managed to seriously dent the hull" as "This also explains why UFOs go down even when our weaponry hasn't managed to seriously dent the hull. The feedback effect causes their power sources to fail".
- STR_JARHEAD_UFOPEDIA: "possesses" should be "possess".
- STR_JARHEAD_INVESTIGATION_UFOPEDIA: "After careful examination", though okay as is, would be nicer as "After a careful examination".
- STR_UNIT_UFOPEDIA: "alerting the government of" should be "alerting the government to".
- STR_MEGAWORM_AUTOPSY_UFOPEDIA: "The skin is not armored but is thick, and it contains" flows better as "The skin is unarmored but thick, and contains". "body length" would be better as just "body". The semicolon would be better as a comma. "inflammation signs" would be better as "signs of inflammation". "They also have" would be better as "These teeth have".
- STR_XCOM_BUREAU_UFOPEDIA: "described as energy being" should be something like "described as a being made out of pure energy".
- STR_JANISSARY_UFOPEDIA: "controlled directly with" would be nicer as "controlled directly through".
- STR_CITY_X_SURVEY_UFOPEDIA: Suggest rephrasing "during approach to" as "as they approached".
- STR_SYNDICATE_PHASE_2_DESCRIPTION: "No other rules apply - do as you wish!" is perfectly fine, but the dash is lost in the actual in-game description due to wonky wrapping, which makes it look weird. As a workaround, it may be worth rephrasing as "No other rules apply, so do as you wish!".
- STR_SYNDICATE_CEO_TRUEFORM_UFOPEDIA: "transform to" would be better as "change into".
- STR_HYBRID_CONTROL_CIRCUITRY_UFOPEDIA: "a built-in 'software'" would be better as "built-in 'software'". "showing that" would be better as "that indicate".
- STR_SYNDICATE_HQ_UFOPEDIA: "arrest whoever is responsible" should be "arrest whomever is responsible". "fearing the leaders will escape - which I totally agree with" lost its dash to wrapping (mostly), but even disregarding that I suggest rephrasing it as "out of concern the leaders will escape - something I totally agree with".
- STR_DIMENSION_X_WRECK_BRIEFING and STR_DIMENSION_X_WRECK_DESCRIPTION: "Dimesion" should be "Dimension".
- STR_ANCIENT_SHIP_COMPUTER_UFOPEDIA: "coming from Mars" is a little ambiguous. Did the ship come from mars, or the power source? If the former, maybe use "The wreck used to be a construction ship from Mars". If the latter, maybe use "a unique power source that came from Mars".
- STR_SCORPOID_PALACE_TAKEOVER_BRIEFING: "over a position of leadership over a local seat of power" looks like an edit gone wrong. Pick one.
- STR_HYBRID_PURGE_DESCRIPTION and STR_HYBRID_PURGE_BRIEFING: "Our objective it" should be "Our objective is".
To hear the lamentations of the mod author:
- The HOVER/ROCKET Ufopedia articles require STR_UFO_CONSTRUCTION, this should be STR_HOVERTANK_ROCKET_LAUNCHER instead.
- The hovertanks don't require grav modules to build or repair, only Elerium. The description does mention an "anti-gravity unit", and given that the gunship does need grav units I feel hovertanks should use them too.
- The regular Psiclone's manufacturing project is unlocked at Metapsychology, but the project itself requires a Psi Lab, which comes along way down the line. Perhaps the project should be unlocked at Psionics.
- When the rocky floor on the cave map set is explodified it becomes impassable. I'm not sure if this is desirable.
- The Skulljack and X-Com Psiclone are in Artifacts, but maybe they would be more at home in Field Equipment because, firstly, they aren't items that can be found as loot, and secondly they would fit best next to the Psi-Amp for easy comparison.
- The Firestorm description still claims it "replicates the flying saucer design" as per the vanilla text, but the new art now belies this.
- In the understanding that the Shogg arc is WIP, I want to mention I was surprised at the Scorpoid Palace Takeover mission, because I had assumed it was going to be an Antmen-based mission. Prior to this mission Antmen are the only inhabitants of Shogg that are exposed to the player, while the Scorpoids are never really introduced except in STR_LIZARD_TRAP_UFOPEDIA, which mentions them in a dismissive manner. The mission itself is fine but it could use a better lead-in.
- Is there a point to the Scorpoid having 12 NV when it also has 13 Psi Sense?
- I'd like to have some detailed info on the X-Com Hybrid. Maybe you could add a SUIT/HYBRID armor entry just to provide access to Stats for Nerds for the baseline Hybrid? It could mention that all X-Com armors apply to the Hybrid soldier as normal.