So far I found this
Removed "to" from last sentence.
Changed ice to ice world (as original name was rather funny - outsider entities offering ice to random visitors
)
Honestly not sure how to rename this one - but something better is required - maybe Rocky plains beyond the Rift or Rocky wasteland behind the Rift.
Added word target to the last sentence so it is clear what is demoralized by spell.
Slightly rewritten description for spell.
Added missing e in word eagle.
Replaced not armed with unarmed.
Replaced can get in last sentence with become.
Replaced word modern word squad with better word retinue.
Changed word order in names of grenades to make much more sense.